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Nobody's home, tonight she's all alone
Whispers are coming from the wall
A hand is touching the broken clock
A heart is slowly turning into stone

The piano plays a medley of the love songs
The door is open but the wind still knocks
And the sound of it beats inside your mind
But no one, not ever would tell you why

The sand still runs inside the broken clock
Whispers are still coming from the dark walls
Pain has frozen inside your empty veins
But the memory of losing still remains

Bloody tears you share with solitude
Tequila, whiskey put you in the mood
No more whispers, no more stupid lies
No more pain in those beautiful eyes


Her sand ran out, her heart has stopped
No memories left, no life, no sound
But she will celebrate tonight, all alone with switched red lights…

Celebrating redemption and being restored
Celebrating her freedom with final reborn
Her heart keeps waiting for the total recall
But the sand that still runs is no longer for her…
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thanks to :iconanoukvandermeer: for the grammar check
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~candygirl101010 Nov 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
i realy like it just wish it ryme more and u used more complex words to make the reader think but all in all its very well writen
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:iconsupergirlswag:
thanks... well I am not a writer...and I have problems with grammar so yeah I know i have a lot to work on!

Thank you :)
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~candygirl101010 Nov 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
np
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~Iamhypocrite Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
включила воображение (или его остатки лол) представила себе это все...всю обстановку,предметы,детали,настроение...красиво,однако...мрачно,но красиво...эдакий пофигизм и завершенность присутствуют (у меня ассоциации с завершенностью, с уверенностью появляются после прочтения твоих стихотворений в последнее время...не знаю)
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:iconsupergirlswag:
ну так может надо как то все закончить
картинка неплохая если рисовать да...
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:iconiamhypocrite:
~Iamhypocrite Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
наверное...

вот,дай задание кому-нибудь,кто хорошо рисует
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:iconsupergirlswag:
есть такое на уме
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~AngelofLight03 Nov 3, 2012  Student Writer
I like this. Great job.
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~AngelofLight03 Nov 6, 2012  Student Writer
You're welcome.
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