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I used to write so many things
I used to smile, I used to sing
I used to be so very happy
I used to be…
And then you trapped me

The piece of paper
On the table
A little story
Of a traitor

Written lines
On the purest heart
Written lines
To lie about

I was the paper
You were the words
You violate me
So I got lost

I am the memory
You are the ghost
I won't be treasuring
Not anymore

You inked the paper
You inked my soul
It won't get better
It won't let go

They will retell this story
The piece of paper gonna burn to ash
And we will shine in endless glory
But it will never heal this painful gash
paper...
thanks to :iconmaephotography2010: for the idea...


It kinda makes sense or not, well you decide
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:iconspice-twinkle-pop:
Spice-Twinkle-Pop Featured By Owner May 28, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
beautiful
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:iconsupergirlswag:
SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner May 28, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!!!
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:iconspice-twinkle-pop:
Spice-Twinkle-Pop Featured By Owner May 28, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
np
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:iconyour-demon-servant:
Your-Demon-Servant Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2015  Student Traditional Artist
Sugoi!! :clap:
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:iconsupergirlswag:
SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
:bow: 
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:icontgraschel40:
tgraschel40 Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2015  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Very powerful words :D you are a great writer.
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:iconsupergirlswag:
SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much!!! :hug: 
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:icontgraschel40:
tgraschel40 Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2015  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
you are very welcome, sorry for late reply, we just finished moving. 
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:iconwillcraft:
willcraft Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Writing can be a method of expressing a many concepts. Here it seems you have used writing to disparage writing itself.
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:iconsupergirlswag:
SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Edited Jan 28, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
I don't think I tried to disparage writing through writing ... Though many people may have many opinions to one thing... The whole point of this poem is  life being a paper of sorts 

But well it's fine by me if you see it the way you see it :)
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:iconemch3ng:
EmCh3ng Featured By Owner Edited Jan 4, 2015  Hobbyist Photographer
It's haunting and beautiful at the same time. Do you write? 
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:iconsupergirlswag:
SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!!!
I do when muse visits :)
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:iconcrystalesvarar:
Crystalesvarar Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2014
Beautiful and painful same time. Love it.
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:iconsupergirlswag:
SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you !!!
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:iconmaxsplace:
MaxsPlace Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2014  Professional Photographer
Makes perfect sense. :D :iconlovecuddleplz:
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:iconsupergirlswag:
SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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:iconmaxsplace:
MaxsPlace Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2014  Professional Photographer
;)
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:iconinnocenceofourhearts:
InnocenceOfOurHearts Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
it's amazing....very metaphoric...and i can relate to this so much...
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:iconsupergirlswag:
SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!!!! Glad you liked it :D
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:iconinnocenceofourhearts:
InnocenceOfOurHearts Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
no problem....you're welcome!<3
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:iconxshatteredxglassx:
XShatteredxGlassX Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is really pretty. Nyuu (Smile) [V2] 
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:iconsupergirlswag:
SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you
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:iconxshatteredxglassx:
XShatteredxGlassX Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You Are Welcome 
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:iconlucifer-poison-angel:
Lucifer-Poison-Angel Featured By Owner May 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is beautiful. It moved me.
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:iconsupergirlswag:
SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner May 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!!!
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:iconlucifer-poison-angel:
Lucifer-Poison-Angel Featured By Owner May 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You are welcome.
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:iconwolfofdesire:
wolfofdesire Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014  Hobbyist
Wow!
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:iconsupergirlswag:
SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:bow: 
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:iconrikibose:
rikibose Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014
trapping
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:iconsupergirlswag:
SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
hmm?
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:iconrikibose:
rikibose Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014
ah...entrapping...somehow, pulls you in, whether you're ready or not...just my first reaction :)
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:iconsupergirlswag:
SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
ah ... got it :D thank you 
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:iconangelajenkinson:
AngelaJenkinson Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It makes perfect sense, yes!
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:iconsupergirlswag:
SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you
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:iconangelajenkinson:
AngelaJenkinson Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome :)
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:iconcamcam-plantagenet:
CamCam-Plantagenet Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Excellent word usage. A truly touching piece, congratulations
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:iconsupergirlswag:
SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you 
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:iconankur707:
ankur707 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014
if I could only show my soul I would.
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:iconsupergirlswag:
SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
you can... through feelings and emotions :hug: 
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:iconbenhammonds:
BenHammonds Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2013   Writer
I love it, great and wonderful image and word usage :D
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:iconsupergirlswag:
SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thanks so much :D means a lot to me!!!
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:iconbenhammonds:
BenHammonds Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2013   Writer
You are very welcome :D
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:icondrawingdreamlyrics:
DrawingDreamLyrics Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2013
Wow the words fit so well everything is just perfect :D
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:iconsupergirlswag:
SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!! Glad you think so :hug: 
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:icondrawingdreamlyrics:
DrawingDreamLyrics Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013
No problem :)
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:iconbohax:
Bohax Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
this is beautiful...
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:iconsupergirlswag:
SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much!!! 
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:iconbohax:
Bohax Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:) (Smile) 
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:iconwallawallaw:
wallawallaw Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013
i agree with msimoneaux20, fantastic idea and very well worded :bow:
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:iconsupergirlswag:
SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much! Means a lot to me!!! :hug:
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