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Baby, I slowly whisper
My lover of this night
My body shivers
And I know exactly why
You drive me crazy
But it feels perfectly fine

Candles are burning
And so am  I
I feel you closely
Easily losing my mind
You're moving so slowly
Making me go wild

Baby, I'm pleading
Gently kissing your lips
Whatever I'm feeling
I want more of this

I want you to be mine
Even if just for tonight

Naked desire of mine
Burning flesh of yours
Heart  instead of mind
Gain instead of loss

It feels good to love
It feels right in the core
I might have just sold my soul
But it was worth it after all
I wrote this few nights ago because of insomnia
Posting this through my phone cause pc died
Hope you'll like it
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:icongreenraingypsykinz52:
Very well written and absolutly beautiful!
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:iconsupergirlswag:
SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thanks I'm glad you liked it!
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:icongreenraingypsykinz52:
Welcome :iconhugplz:
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:iconcarletto47:
carletto47 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Love it.Well written.
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:iconsupergirlswag:
SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you kindly!
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carletto47 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome.
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iKelseyBlaine Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Okay, so, I'm like, obsessed with your writings. I can relate to them so well. Keep it up.
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SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
aw, thanks so much! I'm glad you enjoyed my writings!
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:iconvalkaneer:
Valkaneer Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Professional Writer
PC died! lol

Yeah, they do that often! ;P

Nice one, like all your work, doll!

;)
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:iconsupergirlswag:
SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah imagine that
He's still dead though
Thanks, glad you liked it:)
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:iconvalkaneer:
Valkaneer Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Professional Writer
Hope mine lives a few more years! :D

And hope you get a new one thats a ton better than the last!

:)
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:iconsupergirlswag:
SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ahaha I really hope so!
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:iconvalkaneer:
Valkaneer Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Professional Writer
:iconsupergirlswag: <-----<<|lol, at the new icon!

;P
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SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
no lol and it's not new it's old.. I had this icon since very beginning then changed for a little ... now it's back again
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:iconvalkaneer:
Valkaneer Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Professional Writer
he, he, well, I like it! :D
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:iconsupergirlswag:
SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
hahah so do I :D
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patmp Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Very nice work :clap:
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:iconsupergirlswag:
SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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:iconpatmp:
patmp Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Np! :D
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Chimera64 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Professional Writer
I think it sounds really good. It has a good flow...the one thing I would suggest is the part where you say, "Candles are burning and so do I" I just think it would sound better as "so am I." But, seriously, really good!
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SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! When I was writing this I wasn't sure whether to put "so do I" or "so am I" so thanks for pointing that out ! I'm gonna change it right away! And I'm glad you liked it!
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Chimera64 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Professional Writer
In that case I'm glad I helped :D
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:iconsupergirlswag:
SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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1passionatefool Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013
WoW!!! :omg:
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:iconsupergirlswag:
SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:bow:
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Iamhypocrite Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
о____О :jawdrop: Wow *no comments* *ушла под впечатлением*
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SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ahahha glad you liked it :)
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Iamhypocrite Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
конечно, это ж "не та степь (новый жанр XD)"
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:iconsupergirlswag:
SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Lol :) даешь не ту степь :)
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:iconiamhypocrite:
Iamhypocrite Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
как там...а! HELL YEAH!!! :D
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