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So here we are… on the edge of the earth falling apart
Holding hands together smiling to the rising sun
I hate to say it but it's time to say good bye

One day, one night I'll meet you again
On the edge of the earth I'll kiss you again
Believe me and have faith in our love
I'm giving you my heart in exchange of your soul
We are connected, we are meant to be
Through the eyes of a child world shall see
How I have loved you and how you loved me

Rise before you fall
Live before you die
Take before it's gone
Love before you cry

You said that to me and we fell apart, but nothing matters our love remains in time…

And here I am alone on the edge of the earth waiting for the sun to come up, I wait for you to join me, to hold my hand, to kiss me in the breaking dawn…
waiting is a torture
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is a piece that seems to come more from the heart than from the tongue. Which is why, professionally speaking it lacks many of the forms and details that poets usually care for. Yet on the other hand it has a soft touch to it. It rings well with the feelings and if a bit childish; it still works. So good emotions :)
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SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
well I'm not a professional you know ;) thanks for your comment
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You are welcome :)
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Sutsuki-Sensei Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012
Beautifully written ^^ This is a gorgeous piece.
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SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thanks so much!!!
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patmp Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is beautiful! Well done! :)
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SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thanks Paty!
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patmp Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
No prob dear! :)
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malphasloveshisfries Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Student Writer
Beautiful as always. :) I swear your work just keeps getting better. :heart:
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SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thanks mu friend! means a lot to hear it from you :D
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malphasloveshisfries Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Student Writer
AWWWWW. You're welcome. :glomp:
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ThePinstripeReview Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012
Wow... Some really strong emotions here .3. I especiall liked the line, "Smiling to the rising sun / I hate to say it, but it's time to say goodbye", to me this means that, although it seems that a new beginning is fast approaching (an inevitable new beginning, at that), in reality things are falling apart, with the sunrise perhaps being a simple distraction from the fate the two lovers share.
Of course, there's the repetition of the sunrise motif in the final line, which is quite interesting - it kind of turns the 'inevitable change' idea on its head, as without that one person nothing functions as it should, as it did when the two were "holding hands together", which could then relate back to the other half, the lost lover, having an extremely strong force in the world, causing them to take on an almost God-like stature. This idea is fortified with the line, "The Earth falling apart", as if the foundations of life itself are slowly losing the power to hold themselves together. However, this theory as well is distorted as, again in the final line, the Earth is no longer crumbling - though whether this is more so in connection with nature (which I assume is the symbol of strength here) learning to cope with the loss, or that there is so little left of it that it can no longer crumble is unknown to me. Just one last point, too, regarding the motif of the sun, I noticed that to begin with it was simply the "rising sun", whereas to end it became "the breaking dawn"; of course 'breaking' conjure fairly violent images, matching the mood of the poem entirely, however this is probably just my looking too far in to things :)
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SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
wow!thank you for such review ! I really like it and appreciate .. I like how you understand the concept of the poem:)
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AnoukvanderMeer Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Well written :)
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SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:bow:
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