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You belong to me
Every part of you
Our hearts beat in unison
Blood and flesh
Belongs to me
I'm the saviour
I'm the conqueror
I am the damn hero

I don't need the universe to own
No need of people to love me
I'm more than time
More than life
More than anything
I imprisoned you
I took your spirit, I took your heart
I took everything that you once loved
I took away your life
But you never let me see you cry
You might hate me
But I know you don't
Not a feeling towards me
You spit in your own soul

But I own you
No matter how broken you are
I am the owner of your heart
The master of your soul
The guider of your life
And you are mine
So maybe you should stop fighting
Find something better
Choose darkness instead of light
You don't love me
But you're mine
I am the owner of your heart
And I won't let it fall  apart
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:iconchristianonfire7:
=Christianonfire7 Sep 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
The line.
'I don't need universe to own''
Adding 'the' before universe would come out better.
'So maybe you should stop fight'
I think you should make it 'fighting' instead of just fight.
'And I won't let fall it apart.'
Putting 'fall' after 'it' would make that line flow better.
'And I won't let it fall apart.'


Aside from those lines I like this piece, it's depressing and sad. But so realistic. Well done.
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:iconsupergirlswag:
thanks for advise will change it!
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:iconchristianonfire7:
=Christianonfire7 Sep 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome. :)
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~Mierren Sep 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
i like it a lot! its very unique
plus you just made my day with the line " i am the damn hero"
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:iconsupergirlswag:
aw thank you so much! And I'm glad to hear it! :love:
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:iconescapexyourxfate:
or I found another meaning to it :) like the Devil taking over someone and takin their soul...
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:iconsupergirlswag:
also could be truth, cause I usually write thoughts in my head or some kinda feelings... and sometimes I don't even understand what I'm writing about. And people can see different sense in my poems than I do!

thank you so much for commenting
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:iconescapexyourxfate:
that's the magic of poetry&songs, the author writes it as he feels it and then the reader finds his own special meaning in it.
you're really welcome! ;)
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:iconescapexyourxfate:
Like locking up someone you're cazy about even if they don't want you to keep'em here.
That's just awesome, truly!
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