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Fucked up life
But still perfect
Ideal to no end
Cocaine is the friend
I laugh while crying
It's satisfying
Mesmerizing
No more lying
But keep drinking
Scotch and whiskey
Ending swiftly
It's alright
I live one life
Bottle in my hand
I'm getting bolder
I cry on the stranger's shoulder
He doesn't mind when I ask him to hold me
It's alright
I cut those veins
I scream while laughing
No nights or days
I'm so done fighting
People smile
People love
People lie
And there we go
Smile again
and love again
and lie again
again and again
and over again
to no end.
I don't like this
I don't want you anymore
You suffocate me
Please let me go
Just let go of my wrist
Please, I need this
If this is the last thing I ever feel
then so be it
I want this to overtake me
to embrace me
and finally break me
So let me end this
and please pretend it
pretend like I deserved my happy ending
But still perfect
Ideal to no end
Cocaine is the friend
I laugh while crying
It's satisfying
Mesmerizing
No more lying
But keep drinking
Scotch and whiskey
Ending swiftly
It's alright
I live one life
Bottle in my hand
I'm getting bolder
I cry on the stranger's shoulder
He doesn't mind when I ask him to hold me
It's alright
I cut those veins
I scream while laughing
No nights or days
I'm so done fighting
People smile
People love
People lie
And there we go
Smile again
and love again
and lie again
again and again
and over again
to no end.
I don't like this
I don't want you anymore
You suffocate me
Please let me go
Just let go of my wrist
Please, I need this
If this is the last thing I ever feel
then so be it
I want this to overtake me
to embrace me
and finally break me
So let me end this
and please pretend it
pretend like I deserved my happy ending
nothing fairy tale (ish) here.... just pain
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Overall
Vision Originality Technique ImpactMan this is good. It really reached out to me, you did a great job. My life, as well as everyone else's I'm sure, is full of ups and downs and you really made that point here. The emotions come off really strong, and I can feel for the person speaking in the poem. I love the lines you wrote that give the feeling that we can both love and hate life; "I laugh while crying"; "I scream while laughing". Great stuff, very creative. I also think you did a really good job on the whole free verse style, you seem to really know what you're doing when it comes to that. I've said it time and time again, but some people just don't know what free verse is. They just slap a bunch of words together and call it that. But you know what you're doing.
Nice work.