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Enough tears
Enough crying
I've had too much
I've had enough

Too many sleepless nights
Too many miserable days
Too much of black and white
Too much of grieve and pain

Enough is enough
And that is where it ends
I wanna be myself
I wanna live again

I want to smile
And laugh like crazy
I want to cry
From being happy

I wanna colors back into my life
I've had enough of black and white
I just want to live and breathe and feel
I want to be alive again, I just want to be me
I haven't upload poems cause I was writing complete bullshit. This is an attempt of positive writing... Fuck I really suck at it. I generally suck at writing so yeah... I don't even know
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:iconmichel-le-fou:
Michel here for #poeticalcondition. I promise to be fair.
The most outstanding aspect of the poem is the structure/form. The use of repetitions, specifically. This was certainly intended for effect.Be certain that the effect will come across, because it did for me I could feel your emotion, perhaps contempt or disgust, judging from the first two stanzas, but certainly not delight.Stanza three is the most evident expression, plainly. From there onward, the reader should understand where you stand. I will not rattle on about diction, since this poem expresses best in spoken language. That is simpler. Well-done. Keep writing. Cheers.
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013
All we can do is keep writing. And reading our own work. And maybe do something different next time.
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SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
yeah :)
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Valkaneer Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013  Professional Writer
I think you suck and happy because shitty is normal.

I know what that can be like, but when your unhappy, just picture me in a hula-girl outfit! ;P
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SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ahahhahah :lol: that would be hilarious :D
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Valkaneer Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013  Professional Writer
'at' rather, not 'and'
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SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:giggle:
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xxXxBrokenxAngelxXxx Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013  Student Writer
This doesnt suck, i really like this piece. Its something i really can relate too, and beautifully written. Great Job!
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SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much!
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TomKilbane Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
yeah your right i'll bet ya Bob Dylan said the same thing........your awesome and never think you suck because for one no-one else ever wrote it!!!!! f em!
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SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
aww, thank you so much :hug:
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Sutsuki-Sensei Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013
I don't think you suck at happy pieces. This is very good I get the impression of someone who's sick of being sad and sick of hurting and wants to go back to being happy. I can understand and relate to this, so I think you did a wonderful job ^-^
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SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad you think so!! it is that about need to be happy again.. to feel, love...
Thank you so much!
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Sutsuki-Sensei Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013
You're very welcome ^-^
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GhostOfTheEmptyGrave Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013
I think this is pretty good. I can relate to this, actually. Don't be harsh on yourself, things not always go our way. The key is to keep trying.
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SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :hug:
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