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One, two, three go
Let the walls drop
One, two, three stop
Let the music flow
One, two, three hold
One, two, three drop
Pounding head into the wall
Let us drown in alcohol
Let's lose clothes on the floor
There's no shame, we're getting bold
One before and two goes after
Can't hold in this uncontrollable laughter
Want to smash these empty glasses
Want to cry out, out to the masses
One, two, ten and keep them coming
I'm not stopping but my head is running
Let me drink, let me party
I'm not done yet, just getting started
Feeling dizzy, feeling good
Not a drunkard just misunderstood
Not a party girl just broken hearted
Where's my drink?
Keep them coming
There's no sorrow in the glass
There's no pain, no fucking why's
There's just pleasure and having fun
Not to remember but that's the plan
One, two, three stop
One, two, three go
I'm not getting to the point
Downing yet another shot
Tears subsiding, I'm tasting salt
Pain is dull and so is the night
One more drink and then maybe two more
I'm not ready for ending, don't wanna let go
One more step to make myself stop
One more drink and then I'll wake up
Let the walls drop
One, two, three stop
Let the music flow
One, two, three hold
One, two, three drop
Pounding head into the wall
Let us drown in alcohol
Let's lose clothes on the floor
There's no shame, we're getting bold
One before and two goes after
Can't hold in this uncontrollable laughter
Want to smash these empty glasses
Want to cry out, out to the masses
One, two, ten and keep them coming
I'm not stopping but my head is running
Let me drink, let me party
I'm not done yet, just getting started
Feeling dizzy, feeling good
Not a drunkard just misunderstood
Not a party girl just broken hearted
Where's my drink?
Keep them coming
There's no sorrow in the glass
There's no pain, no fucking why's
There's just pleasure and having fun
Not to remember but that's the plan
One, two, three stop
One, two, three go
I'm not getting to the point
Downing yet another shot
Tears subsiding, I'm tasting salt
Pain is dull and so is the night
One more drink and then maybe two more
I'm not ready for ending, don't wanna let go
One more step to make myself stop
One more drink and then I'll wake up
Finally something that I didn't delete. Something that doesn't feel forced.
Took me few minutes because muse apparently was nearby
Took me few minutes because muse apparently was nearby
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Hey there,
Prettyflour here on behalf of 
with the critique you requested.
I’m so glad you didn’t delete this! I really like the feel of this poem- you’ve captured the feel of a wild night out- drinks abounding, drinking and partying to mask some kind of pain. Oh, I’ve been there, which is probably why I find this so relatable.
I’m digging the rhyming in this too and I think it flows pretty well. I will say that I feel like the last couple of lines in the 5th stanza feel…I don’t know…kind of disjointed BUT that sorta disjointed feel and the words you used really worked to show the confusion that can come along with being drunk.
I hope this is helpful and thank you so much for sharing your words! 